Hi SV, nice to have you drop by again. I hate to bring you bad news., but this excerpt was nicely written. You have a unique voice that shines through because technically you are good. Good writing to me is someone unique like you sharing a story or making me see life in a different way. Sloppy writing full of mistakes and cliches looses me quickly erasing the most brilliant of concepts. You write well and have a compelling voice SV despite your need to deny it.. Always enjoy the discussions, stop by and time and thank you as always for the read and comment.